Showing posts with label authors. Show all posts
Showing posts with label authors. Show all posts

Saturday, August 23, 2014

A Writing Tip from Kathy Ide

Multi-published author, Kathy Ide has a tip for better writing for us. I confess this is one I struggle with. Should I use as or when?


AS vs. WHEN: Tips for Better Writing

By Kathy Ide

 

As (when used as a conjunction, as in “As this happened, that happened”) implies that the second thing occurred while (within the same time frame as, during the time in which) the first thing was in the process of happening.

 

When implies that the second thing happened at the same moment in time that the first thing happened (a specific time being the essential element).

 

Examples:

 

"As the garage door came down (while it was in the process of coming down), the cat scurried under it."

vs.

"When the garage door came down (at the moment it touched the concrete), it hit the cat."

 

As she bid him farewell, a tear fell down her cheek.” (During the time it took for the tear to fall, she was in the process of bidding him farewell. Both took about the same amount of time.)

vs.

When she bid him farewell, a tear blurred her vision.” (At the moment in time when she told him good-bye, a tear appeared.)

 

“When the dance ended, she thought, I’ll never see him again.” (At the moment in time when the dance ended, that thought came to her mind. The two things happened at approximately the same point in time.)

 

The Dictionary of Problem Words and Expressions by Harry Shaw says that as is “one of the most useful and most overworked words in the language. … As a conjunction, however, as is usually weaker (less effective) than since, because, and when, each of which is more exact.”

 

The Wordwatcher’s Guide to Good Grammar and Word Usage (by Morton S. Freeman) says that as (when used as a conjunction) is often “fuzzy” because it is ambiguous. “It may be conveying the idea of time (which needs when) or of cause (which needs because).”

 

Their example: “As the time grew short, the people became fidgety” could mean either “When the time grew short, the people became fidgety” or “Because the time grew short, the people became fidgety.” They recommend using when or because instead of as to avoid ambiguity or possible misreading.

 

 

 
 
 
 
Kathy Ide is a published author/ghostwriter, editor/mentor, and writers’ conference speaker. Her latest book is Proofreading Secrets of Best-Selling Authors. To order, visit www.secretsofbestsellingauthors.com. Kathy is the founder and coordinator of The Christian PEN: Proofreaders and Editors Network (www.TheChristianPEN.com) and the Christian Editor Connection (www.ChristianEditor.com). To find out more, visit www.KathyIde.com.  





















Sounds like a book all writers need. Thanks, Kathy, for visiting Writing with God's Hope blog today. I think I understand the as vs. when dilemma. Anyone else have a problem with that besides me?

Saturday, June 15, 2013

Sovereignty

The Kingdom of God is not a democracy.

I am God and there is no other.
I am God, and there is none like Me.
I make known the end from the beginning, from ancient times, what is still to come.
My purpose will stand, and I will do all that I please.
                                                                     Isaiah 46: 9-10

America is a republic. We have no king. We run the country with democratic ruling. We vote on laws, we protest ones we don't like, we elect those that have the say over our lives.

In the Kingdom of God, He is King.  What He says will happen regardless of the way we believe it should be. If you don't think this, then you have yet to be knocked down by trauma. All it takes is one time. Sickness or disability strikes you. A child or grandchild dies. A tornado rips away your house and all your belongings. Then we realize, we only have two choices; to accept God as sovereign and trust Him to mean us good, or to fight and rebel which will end in our ultimate defeat.

Our resolve should be to trust in the one who was before time begun and who has the final say. We can't understand the Mind of God. It's far above our human comprehension. We can't see the future or the repercussions of our decisions, but God can. He leads with the end result in His plan.

For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are My ways higher than your ways, and My thoughts than your thoughts.
                                                                     Isaiah 55:9

A few years ago,  one of Kathy Macias' online devotions explained a Dennis the Menace cartoon that she had read. I shall never forget the picture it reveals. The little guy is kneeling beside his bed, cowboy hat askew, and plastic gun still holstered around his waist as he folds his hands in supplication, and says, "I'm here to turn myself in."

If you're going through struggles today, remember the posture we must take; head bowed, all fight gone, submitted to our Sovereign God.

(Just a note: 2 of my favorites are highlighted today; one of my favorite books in the Bible, Isaiah, and one of my favorite authors, Kathy Macias.)

The time when I had to bow to God in submission and realize it was all in His hands was when we lost our 8-day-old granddaughter. All I could do was fall on my face before God.

Have any of you felt the arm of God's sovereignty in your life?